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A Belt That Fits

Post by Awakening on Sat Dec 03, 2011 1:37 am

It isn't easy specializing on one Pokemon Type, or so I've heard. Birds, Psychics, and Ghosts are the first problem. The second problem is me! Can I, a Goldenrod wimp, really become a Fighting Type Master? With an ex Police Rookie and amnesiac girl joining me, an obsessive Psychic rival trailing me, and while coming face to face with a group of poachers, can I really prove to the world that you don't have to be a meat head to train Fighting Types?! Of course I can, right?


Chapter Guide
Chapter 1 Life As We Know It
Chapter 2 Big Expectations
Chapter 3 What Revenge?
Chapter 4 Sleep My Child
Chapter 5 Stubborn Makes Two
Chapter 6 Hopeless Affair
Chapter 7 Dark Faces
Chapter 8 Ain't Afraid of No Ghost
Chapter 9 Sensationalism At Large
Chapter 10 Stripped
Chapter 11 Tying Winds Together
Chapter 12 Ruins of Conflict [New!]
Chapter 13 [10% Completed/TBR: ~4/8]

Reviews, comments and the like would great. I'd really like to know what you guys think!
New chapter posted on Sunday!


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Post by Guest on Sat Dec 03, 2011 2:56 am

Intresting story you have there :3
Keep it up man , really good stuff Razz

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Post by Evan on Sat Dec 03, 2011 3:28 am

I loved it. And I don't read fanfiction. You make me want to write something xD

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Post by Safiliwen on Sat Dec 03, 2011 9:01 am

Well uh, how do I put this...that was erm...pretty fucking awesome and a hell of a lot better than I was expecting especially for a fanfic (You know what with the trend of fanfics usually sucking more ass than a gay guy on poppers) But seriously keep it up man Very Happy

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Post by Lynjabear on Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:28 pm

The stories are beautiful, but I can catch grammatical mistakes and word misuse (e.g. considering Goldenrod's mass[ive] amount of people). I usually hate fanfictions but these were a lot better than I thought they would be. Can't wait for Chapter 5 Very Happy

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Post by Evan on Sat Dec 03, 2011 9:14 pm

Thats not an error. Mass describes the population as a whole, but massive is just a more modern term. Mass is still technically right.

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Post by Guest on Sat Dec 03, 2011 9:45 pm

Awake said I can be the beta reader . So yeah , ill help him on catching some errors :p

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Post by Lynjabear on Sat Dec 03, 2011 10:32 pm

Mass = noun

Massive = adjective

You may be right, but I think mass is a noun, and doesn't make sense. I don't know for sure, but I thought it was like that.. 0_o

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Post by Awakening on Sun Dec 04, 2011 1:08 am

Chapter 5

New chapter! Thanks for the support guys. Leo's currently helping me out get mistakes, but if there are any errors that we both miss, please don't hesitate to post them!
Once again, thanks for the comments guys, it does mean a lot.

And as always, R/C is welcomed!

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Post by Evan on Sun Dec 04, 2011 5:04 pm

I'll help you if you still need it :3

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Post by Awakening on Sun Dec 04, 2011 5:14 pm

I wouldn't mind having two beta readers making sure I don't get any inconsistenxies and errors out on the actual release date. So if you'd like, you can be my second beta reader. C:

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Post by Evan on Sun Dec 04, 2011 8:53 pm

Sounds nifty c:

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Post by thetimmon on Mon Dec 05, 2011 4:51 am

wut does r/c mean?

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Post by Qualna on Mon Dec 05, 2011 5:11 am

Really great stuff. Good to see there are still some creative minds out here. I just had a thought. I could write my own Pokemon fanfic as well and once both our works our finished we make a collaboration story with the two protagonists from each one crossing over into one universe. But that's up to you.

Evan wrote:I loved it. And I don't read fanfiction. You make me want to write something xD
And then not finish it, right?

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Post by Awakening on Mon Dec 05, 2011 5:41 pm

R/C means Review and Comment, Tim. Even though sometimes I replace the Comment with Critique. :B

Thanks Qualna, that means a lot! Making a crossover at the end sounds a like a lot of fun, and I'd be really interested and be sure to read if you began writing a story yourself.

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Post by buckthefuffalo on Mon Dec 05, 2011 6:23 pm

Read the first chapter yesterday. I really liked it! Good job Awake, and I hope you're able to finish it :3

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Post by Awakening on Sat Dec 17, 2011 7:51 pm

Chapter 6 has been up on FF since last Sunday, but I completely forgot to update it. D:
Chapter 6
Chapter 7 is still due for tomorrow like usual, and if I don't update either here or FF, check on my FF page to see if anything came up.

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Post by Awakening on Sun Dec 18, 2011 9:26 pm

Chapter 7 is up!

Whew. Next week's update is Christmas. And then my birthday. Fun stuff.


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Post by L on Sat Dec 24, 2011 5:26 am

there are some grammatical mistakes, but i guess its good. i skimmed chapter one, read parts of it. it seems nice from what i read, i guess. but from what i heard you planned for it.... how could it go from whats in chapter one to.... what you have planned?

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Post by Frashu on Sat Dec 24, 2011 11:30 am

I've still been reading it, keep it up.

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Post by Evan on Sun Dec 25, 2011 1:01 am

Reshiram, there were no grammatical mistakes. I've read through them all.

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Post by L on Mon Dec 26, 2011 10:02 pm

in the first chapter, i think there were one or two, but it might have just been a different style of writing and i didnt recognize it, sorry if they were not mistakes.

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Post by Awakening on Tue Dec 27, 2011 11:03 pm

Chapter 8 is up!

Thanks to Evan and Leo for proofreading!

Next Chapter may be put up late too, since birthday... But usual Sunday chapters should continue after that!

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Post by Lynjabear on Wed Dec 28, 2011 7:41 pm

Birthday? When is your birthday?

I read this chapter completely through, and I'm a little confused, because I didn't read the chapters before it entirely. Is the psychic person different than the fighting person? I think so, because it wouldn't make sense otherwise...

I really liked the way the psychic guy was portrayed in the fight against hitmonlee. Great job with the story!

and one really funny thing. There were almost no grammatical errors until the second last sentence, where it says "A thank you to my friends Evan and Leo, who helped with the proof reading!"

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Post by Awakening on Mon Jan 02, 2012 3:40 am

Birthday was yesterday on the first, Epic. C:

The Main Character is Sebastian, aspiring to become a Fighting type Master, while Mark is the Psychic seen in Chapter 4. Last chapter the beginning flashback that happens every chapter was his, and this chapter concludes it. He'll appear soon enough, though! Serves as Sebastian's Foil Character.

Is it bad that I made Proof Reading one word on purpose? I like it much more as one word. xD;;


As for Chapter 9, it has to be delayed unfortunately. I will post it when it's ready, hopefully b the end of the week, so please bear with it!


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